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Bill Delvaux

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About Bill Delvaux

  • Birthday 03/23/1957

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  1. Thanks, April, for your comments and suggestions. I always appreciate it when others respond!
  2. Aimee, thanks for sharing a bit of your story and your helpful suggestions. I too have struggled with anxiety and health issues recently, so I can empathize!
  3. Helen, I was definitely pulled in and swimming in the water myself trying to figure out what was going on. Really disoriented! I also loved the treasure hunt idea and then the real hunt of finding the mom. My only suggestion would be to clarify the earrings and the hole a bit. I actually was expecting the picture of the mother to show her missing one of the earrings and that would explain the one that was found. I also didn't understand the hole. Was it in the floor? Why was it dug? Thanks for sharing.
  4. @JoyI love the idea of the two earthquakes that disoriented you in life. But you started this from the church service to disorient us in our perception of what was happening. I was drawn to the story and wanted to find out what had happened. You built tension and then resolved it as we began to understand what had happened.
  5. @JoyI love the idea of the two earthquakes that disoriented you in life. But you started this from the church service to disorient us in our perception of what was happening. I was drawn to the story and wanted to find out what had happened. You built tension and then resolved it as we began to understand what had happened.
  6. Hey everyone, thank you so much for the comments. I have never done much fiction writing. It has all been non-fiction or poetry, so this encourages me to keep working at this. Here's a little background on where I got the idea. After Jonathan posted the prompt, I landed on a story I read about a couple of years ago. It had to do with Father Thomas Keating, the founder of centering prayer (the prayer of silence). It was told that he could do his 20 minutes of centering prayer in the middle of busy airport without feeling distracted. As I remembered the story, I realized this could be a good dis
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