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  1. @Ray Gregory I think the below portion you are asking about are tears. Notice the "quivers" of the one holding the baby.
  2. I worked in a nursing home for my college years and recognized this scene of you leaving and a hand gripping you tightly immediately. Your description of this man in the nursing home is SO dead on. I've seen dozens of them just like that, and always wondered how much they were understanding of their circumstances, and what kind of people they had been. I've also wondered how, with all their frailties, how the elderly have such strength in their hands! Thank you for sharing this story.
  3. Very interesting story! You drew me right in. I think in this quoted section that you have two places that say 'Mandy' that should say 'Lydia.'
  4. Thank you for your kind words! I'm glad the piece was relatable, and that it was OK to leave it unresolved. That is how life is, isn't it? David cried to God so many times, and the psalms don't end with answers, they often end with David encouraging himself by remembering God's faithfulness in the past, and trusting that it will be so in the future. Jesus, also, had no answer on the cross to His question, "My God, My God, why hast Thou forsaken me?" Those things helped me a lot during this time. Esp because in Ps 22, it says prophetically of Christ, "and when he cried unto Him, he heard.
  5. I'm glad to hear that the tension was resolved, because I was afraid that leaving the ending with the question was too open. But, living at that moment, it that was all the ending I had. I was in the middle of something.
  6. Thank you. And, there is a lot of story before and behind, and it is all redemptive. That Sunday night at church, we finished the service with another wonderful hymn, "God Will Take Care of You." I also just stood and listened, and was very comforted.
  7. Thank you. Honesty was the only way I could deal with the unexpected changes the Lord allowed in our lives, but it was painful.
  8. I thought it was fine. The assignment was a disorienting beginning, and you threw us into the scene with the water spurting everywhere, and two characters, and then we know they are looking for something, and then why. It was good!
  9. Hi! I got that it was a birth at about the coughing part, but that is because I am a midwife. I did not get that it was a c-section until I look back. I initially pictured the "wedge of light" as the baby's eyes being born. Definitely not a gentle homebirth here; that baby would have gone right up to the Voice's chest for warmth and love! After knowing it was about adoption, I could see that in the second section, but first I thought that one of the voices was the father, but then there was another deeper voice, and so then I wasn't sure. This is very sweet, especially about "I
  10. Thank you, @Lindsay Kyle and @Helen Dent for reading and for your comments. I'm glad to hear that you all could relate and enjoyed hearing what you had to say.
  11. Funny, funny. Great telling of the narrator's thoughts. The only thing I'd change was this. Since the sentence before said "Mom called from the kitchen." , here you could just say "Oh no. I didn't count on that."
  12. Wow! What a great story! I want to read the whole book.
  13. Just to clarify, this is autobiographical, and now, 4 years later, I do agree that It will be worth it all...one day. I'm not sure if this meets the disorienting start, but it was what I could come up with.
  14. Really, really like these lines and the Truth they express.
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