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The Mouse in the Attic


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Renee Mathis

(Jonathan - thank you for posting this exercise! We have all experienced death in many ways over these past few months and there are great sadnesses and losses everywhere we look. This particular "death" was recent-yesterday- and this exercise forced me to see it in a new way. This assignment stretched me and I'm grateful for the opportunity. I will also add that it's hard to go first! - Renee)

 

The Mouse in the Attic

 

This vermin in our world is a curse.

Death has silenced the nightly clattering above

Its stench assaults us and profanes the air.

The question remains, “Are there more?”

 

Is this what dominion looks like?

The purchase of costly poison that works quickly?

O Lord, even as this creature’s life has ended

Preserve my husband’s as he climbs over rafters, hacking his way through the forests of insulation, 

Searching for the offensive corpse.

 

With thankful hearts we lie down to sleep;

The fight is over for now.

O Lord, may this battle remind us that this home and this curse are temporary,

That your victory is eternal,

That death’s tiny squeak will be silenced once and for all.

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Elizabeth Giger

This was so creative! I really liked the way you turned the death of such a tiny piece of creation into your Psalm of Lament.

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Hope Henchey

Lamenting the existence of pests but also the death of them...what wondrously complex things. I felt the pain of all of it through this piece. I loved this...and I hope that mouse was the only one.

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Guest Cindy Ragsdale

"That death’s tiny squeak will be silenced once and for all."

 

Amen. (I'm coming up on a death anniversary; this word-frame -- a "tiny squeak" -- is a gift to me. Thanks!) 

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Barb Knuckles

This surprised me but has stuck in my mind. It took me back to an early apartment that my husband and I rented where the mice nearly drove our dog mad and I still was soft hearted enough to feel sad about killing them. Like Cindy, the line about "death's tiny squeak" has stuck with me.

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